Failed video contest submission i need help.

Hey guys,

I need some help. I am entered in a video contest for an intel lan. And i could use people watching and rating my video. I am not a video editor at all so you can rate it for a 1 but every rate does help me get closer to winning and i can use all the help i can get at this point.

The video is http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Xd1SvNDQhe0

Also note i tried to make it look like i sucked and than would up the frames to so performance boost but didnt work like that well...

but events coming up soon and i'd like to at least take 3rd place currently in 4th any help would be great along with feedback.