Now I'm not one to post, considering my account is pretty much inactive, but after reading the THG post about Spiderman, I felt inclined to write my own.
WARNING: Some Spoilers are contained
Then again, if you have seen the previews for the movie, you know what's going to happen already.
I had many problems with the film; I'll just list them as I go.
1. Worst dialogue writing I have heard in a while. Whenever I hear something really contrived and un-natural, I just roll my eyes... I did that a lot this film. The exposition of the butler was the worst part of the movie. Who ever wrote this, needs to be put down so I don't waste any more time on bad movies. Bad dialogue was just the beginning... there was a thin plot, and riddled with holes, but I'll get into that later.
2. Everything is all way TOO convenient and becomes very soap opera, and laughable at that. So of all the place in the world, the meteor hits by Spiderman's bike, and just latches on... come on, you can do better than that! Oh, and Harry loses his memory, but just the bad part of recent.... right... I can believe that. ABC-Mid-day TV has its viewers; I'm not one of them. Oh and did I mention, that the Sandman just happen to fall into some sort of proton execelerator machine IN THE MIDDLE OF THE NIGHT, and it just happens to run as he falls in. UM.... riiiiight. I'm not buying this one, not even for the 10.50 I wasted to see the film. Oh and Venom and Eddie Brock, right there at the same time, right.... Oh and forget what we already told you, Peter's uncle he wasn't killed by that one guy, it's this other guy. We can't raise the stakes ourselves, so we'll just do it with really bad re-writing of decent material.
3. Oh, and Spiderman starts to have a dark side, so what did they decide to do. Let's just dress him up in a black suit, oh, and let's throw on a smidgen of the gothic hairstyle to make him look all dark and mysterious. Not to mention, the Co-Co bongo dance that we saw in the Mask, that was here too. He was all about playing the piano and dancing on tables. That was my "Jump the Shark" moment right there. I was counting down the minutes till it was over at that point.
4. The Characters.... or lack thereof. Ok, so I could only assume that the writers or producers had a bowl full of plot ideas and threw them at a magnetic board. Whatever stuck... they kept, and boy was that a mistake. They threw in so many characters and plot lines and spent the most time on the weakest points. The poor symbiot was left in the cold. In the movie it makes Spiderman dark, and that's it. It doesn't make him any more powerful, or at least even seem that way. There is no connection between the two. The simbiot itself should have been a character, but alas, no it wasn't. It was just an added plot point, poorly explained, and poorly executed. I felt sorry for the Sandman. He was supposed to be a complex character that only does what he needs for his daughter. That fell flat on its face with very poor predictable dialogue and was only visited once in the entire film, and that was barely before the character was even introduced. We don't even know the character enough to care about what he is doing and why. It could have been SOOO much better had they given hints along the way and revealed it later in a much more clever way. Instead, his character was as flimsy of the material he was made out of. As for Venom, the long awaited Character, why oh why spend the least amount of time, on the one piece that was actually believable?! The character was spot-on, the acting was great, and the performances were on par!
5. When Peter cries... we laugh... and so did the rest of the audience. Especially for all the campy emotional scenes. If those weren't pathetic enough, let's just throw in the scenes where Spidey is being praised by the entire city, and then throw in self-glorification lines, which are no doubt those said by the writers as they were writing these pieces. The slowest parts of the movie were the emotional arcs of Peter and Mary Jane. We have visited these characters before and again and again. Let's beat the dead horse raw with the same emotions over and over again. We get that MJ is jealous of Peter's success at Spidey. We got it the first 10 times it was said. Throwing in the 2nd romantic interest would have been nice if it would have been more involved and actually conflicting. Instead, she was just a tool of Jealousy, and poor at that. Spidey wouldn't have kissed her had it been properly written, but I'll go into that later in how I would have fixed this film.
6. The campy news anchors were horrible, however real; the "End of Spider-man" line was like, What the hell were you thinking?!?
I could go on and on and on about how it was bad, how was it good? Only a few saving graces.
Bruce Campbell - what can I say, an amazing sequence, not carried by the Stars, which it should have been, but by this amazing actor and his ability to make the smallest gestures humorous!
Jameson- Great Character, and funny scenes... the little girl scene was kind of weak, but it worked for a cheap laugh.
Eddie Brock- Nicely played for the short screen time he had. He was genuine and believable, one of the few!
Ok, now that I've ripped it to shreds, how could it have been better?
3 Villains? Hmmm... Let's make that merely 2. I'll keep Sandman, explore his character more and make him a more internally divided character. Re-cast it for someone who can play that role better, or at least give him better direction.
We start with the Sandman, and fighting with Spiderman, of course we don't really learn much about him at first, but how he becomes the way he is. Spiderman wins of course. Sandman appears intermittent throughout the plot, subdued a bit till later on.
Oh, and he didn't kill Peter's uncle, that plotline stays the same. Spidey- bonds with the Simbiot within the first 20 minutes of the film, and not from a meteor, let's say by Doctor Conner's. Start the movie with him on a research grant going through some of the things left over, and the material is found inside the meteor. Since he's a teacher, Peter could have been there the entire time. The simbiot (being a actual character in my version) would have seen something in Peter aside from everyone else, and strived to bond with him rather than anyone else. After all, if you have to live along with someone, you want to choose your strongest resource.
Green Goblin, defeats Spiderman before the Symbiot can bond with Spidey. The city starts to lose faith in him, not being as strong as he used to be. Harry wants to humiliate Spider man, and in a very strong way. Tactics change however, as the simbiot bonds with Spiderman. He starts to lose control at moments when the Symbiot is the strongest. Spiderman actually becomes unconscious in the battle, but the symboit keeps him going and Green Goblin is defeated. Spidey doesn't resort to hurting him, as he still has hope in helping Harry. He's finding himself changing inside and becoming someone different. As he tries to part himself with the symboit, he becomes addicted to it. He has ties with it.
Harry changes his tactics and starts to attack Spidey where he is weakest, whom he can't always protect, MJ and Aunt May. As the battle continues, Spiderman kills Harry. Spiderman is torn internally as he has gone way too far. He tries to destroy the suit, but it keeps coming back to him. He uses Dr. Conner's help to remove it. But it doesn't work.
Meanwhile, the Sandman is continuing on his venture, as we learn that he isn't as bad as we thought. Spiderman, enhanced by the simbiot now, is able to defeat the Sandman, but in a bad way. Spiderman removes himself of the simbiot, and the Sandman escapes. His true character is know. As the simbiot separates, it is found by Eddie Brock, who it attaches itself to, and he shares a hatred towards spiderman as well.
That's a rough sketch, but it's more formatted and shapely than theirs, and i came up with that as I wrote it. Give me a little while of pre-production and WHAM, you got yourself a better film.
And to let you know, this only took 20 min to write